Я бы написала на русском, но почему-то счетчик не считает русские слова
So I've given you 4 stars for vision, because the colors were chosen wisely, one can clearly understand what you were aiming for and no doubt there's some pretty Toothy
3 stars for originality because you know...it's fan art, so i can't really say it's very original.
3 stars for technique because there are obviously some issues with it. Mostly, it's the choice of paper (or canvas, whatever it is). It's too rought for the pencil. I can really see the grind and it's not a good effect. Also, because of unappropriate paper you couldn't bring pecils to draw their best. If you paper was softer, the colors would be brighter and bolder and mixed better.
4 stars for impact because after all, I really like the picture and find it pretty. With some technical improvement it'll shine!
So good job and wish you inspiration and progress.